That said, you presented your research really nicely and the covers are excellent. You are clearly very creative. Make sure that you really think carefully about your photography because your creativity means that you could be in line for an A star on your coursework.
20/01/20 - Firstly, please add in the 00 Teacher's Comment section to your blog so that it is easy for me to find all of the comments I have made collected in one place.
Secondly, I am VERY impressed with you Callum. Your first task was highly creative, and this second task is also creative, but in addition, shows really strong attention to detail, especially in the way you have reflected upon all of your production work. That is the best way to develop. Each task I set is designed to help you grow and the more meticulously you approach it, the more you will get out of it. Yours is excellent. Combine the photograph with the attention to layout and design and I would be surprised if you are not looking at an A star in a few months time.
Really try to think carefully about convergent elements in your music magazine task. This will be the icing on the cake for the A star.
Very well done.
??/04/20 -
Research
You noticed some really interesting things here and present well.
Make sure that your research always impacts your main task and that you look
even more closely when it comes to the real thing.
Magazine
The cover is good, especially the photography/image manipulation.
You have not taken the same level of care with your sell lines that you did
with your fashion magazine task and this does detract from the overall impact.
Copy and existing piece or think very carefully about the impact of placement
of sell lines. Ideally start by copying and then embellish. This is also true
of your contents. You've clear put a lot of effort into this and it is
impressive to see. But thin about things like columns and borders and gutters.
They make an impact on the visual effectiveness of the piece.
18/25 - A little more attention to layout and design will lift
this much higher.
Website
Yours is a little better than most, but still suffers somewhat
from the sense that there will not be much to read in you magazine. I am not an
expert on websites, but my overall impression is that they are very text dense
on their home pages and that this promises more to come as we look deeper.
Almost like an interactive newspaper. Photography is good, but again, copy,
copy and copy some more. Embellish once you are happy that you have all the
features you can/
16/25 - Room for improvement here, but lots of potential.
Convergence
Given that this was the main focus I am happy that this is what
you did best. While there were several things you could have included you
clearly tried to capture the sensibilities of the magazine on your website. I
could feel a close connection between them.
7/10 - Still room for improvement, but very well done.
41/60 - C grade - Literally one mark away from a B grade. You
should be aiming for an A or an A star in this. Well done.
Mr. H
